Archives for May 2018

Endemic offered a contract

Stop the presses!

A book I wrote ten years ago has been accepted for publication. ENDEMIC is the story of a team of covert operatives who work for a shadowy organization with access to technology decades ahead of what is commonly available. The agents are sent to the Congo to investigate an outbreak of the Ebola virus. What they find is the greatest threat to humanity has returned from the distant past. A doctor, a scientist, a bioengineered martial artist, a voodoo priest and a cyborg, not all of them will survive their encounter with the horrible truth.

ENDEMIC is scheduled for release in December, 2018.

Lesson #14- Listen to Feedback

14- Listen to feedback. Your readers are trying to tell you how to write a better book.

NP: BTS didn’t always have the beginning it has now. Initially, it was the story of a tank company on the northwest frontier fighting to survive the seed storm and hostile natives. I had conceived something that was a cross between Team Yankee and Anabasis.

This didn’t go over well with my test audience. My wife kept falling asleep while reading and asking so many questions about what was going on in the book that it was clear I was not writing something intelligible to the average reader.

I wrote the first chapter of the final version of NP: BTS for fun. Instead of the grim valley of the seed storm, I wrote about the prince’s ball at the palace in Persepolis. I wrote about dancing and introduced the women characters. To my surprise, the result was much better than the original story. My wife was suddenly paying attention, and her questions were about who the people were instead of about radio procedure. For a little while, I worked on both versions before abandoning the first.

I abandoned almost all of it- fifty thousand words. All that remains is the flashback of Basir’s childhood when he found a native seed. The rest is gone.

What I was doing was introducing too much at once. There was the exotic setting with the seed storm and the native tribes on top of a military setting that most people are not familiar with. I was also introducing the characters as people. It was too much for the story to sustain.

The new beginning introduced the characters and the world while something most readers will understand, a formal ball, is happening. The story can sustain the reader’s curiosity without overwhelming them with action.

I’m told War and Peace opens the same way. Oops.

I didn’t quite give up on the earlier beginning. I put in a prologue chapter about Basir, my main character, finding a seed as a child. I even re-wrote that chapter to have more action. My wife hated the re-write.

So did a publisher, who in their rejection letter recommended that I start the book with the real beginning of the book, the ball because the prologue was better as a flashback and only served to slow the book down. I finally made the change to start with the ball, sent it back, and…

The publisher rejected it again.

Welp.

I didn’t give up and kept submitting to other publishers. I kept the suggestion in mind and kept the ball at the beginning. It worked, and Wings ePress picked up my book.

Listening to feedback improved my book. What I originally wanted to write wasn’t the best story I could tell. Left to myself, I would have written something, but it would have been a very different, and inferior, book.

There are other examples of changes I made to the MS because of feedback, too many to list here. All changes improved the book.

To write the best story, listen to what readers are telling you.

The World of New Persia

Possible spoilers! If you’ve read the book, this post may be of interest because it contains certain information the characters of the book do not have.

From 70 Ophiuchi B, our sun lies between Orion’s belt and the star Sirius in the night sky.

New Persia is the largest nation on the only continent of a planet orbiting the star 70 Ophiuchi A, which is 16.6 light years from Earth. 70 Ophiuchi A is orbited by a distant binary star, 70 Ophiuchi B, which circles the more massive star every eight decades. The light cast by the binary at its closest approach is similar to our sun at twilight after sunset. The orbit is highly elliptical, and when 70 Ophiuchi B is far away, it dims to the brightest star in the sky. It can always be seen in daylight. It rises and sets with the rotation of the planet, and during half the year it rises during the primary night. During this time the light level on the surface never reaches darkness, and the light level depends on the distance to the binary star.

Orbit of 70 Ophiuchi B as seen from Earth

There are other planets in the star system, but they are not significant yet.

70 Ophiuchi A is a K0 orange dwarf. Its light is dimmer than the sun’s as seen on Earth and appears orange-tinted to humans on the planet. The native vegetation is pigmented a dark purple to take advantage of the lower light frequency better.

The native vegetation is exceptionally hardy and drought resistant. The single continent on the planet has a large interior where almost no rain falls. Temperatures in the interior can reach more than 150 degrees Fahrenheit, and no Earth life can survive there.

Because of the seasonal heating of the interior and the relative coolness of the oceans, monsoons develop. Hot, dry winds blowing out from the interior alternate with cool, wet winds blowing from the sea. The New Persians live in the monsoon zone between the southern ocean and the central Waste and benefit from steady, predictable rains that support agriculture.

When the rains fail, a climactic event called a seed storm is set in motion. When the interior does not receive the scant amount of rain it gleans from the last gasps of the monsoon, the native life spawns. Plants produce seed pods the size of Earth apples which extend long threads meant to catch the wind and carry the seed aloft. When the dry monsoon winds come again, they blow out of the bone-dry interior in the form of sandstorms. The sandstorms bring seed pods with them. In an average dry year, the storms don’t go very far out of the Waste and carry few seeds south. The winds are only a significant threat when they are both powerful and bring the seeds of many native plants. This happens on average twice a century. When several dry years coincide with a particularly strong monsoon, the results can be catastrophic.

The seeds carried south inside the monsoon dust storms ride high in the air until their threads are damaged, or the storm weakens and deposits them on the ground. When they touch the ground or are buffeted hard by the wind, the seed case bursts and sprays a flammable liquid over the seed husk. The dry shell is easily ignited by static electricity within the sandstorm. Now burning, the seed will spread fire wherever it lands. The seed pod still trails the threads that keep catching the wind and dragging the seed across the ground. Because the native plants spawn during droughts, wherever the seeds land is likely to be dry and ready to burn.

Seed Storms are even worse than California wildfires.

The seeds themselves are fire-resistant. They sprout in the ash left by the passing of the storm, and a devastated area is soon home to thousands of growing native plants. Because the soil biochemistries of native and Earth plants are incompatible, the seed storm leaves vast swathes of land poisoned and no longer suitable to support human life.

It can take decades to recover from a seed storm, and some areas are never reclaimed at all. At times in the past, colossal seed storms left entire human civilizations under layers of ash. The technology available to the inhabitants of the planet in the thirty-fourth century AD is not as advanced as the original Founders possessed. Several massive storms have set back human progress and limit humanity’s ability to colonize the entire planet. The current level of technology is equivalent to Earth’s in the mid-twentieth century.

Human civilization and human life on the planet itself is threatened by the seed storms. Nations can fall before a storm. Only vast empires can survive in the long term because they are more difficult for one storm to destroy. Storms still have consequences, and the consensus among historians of the Azanian war is that New Persia defeated Azania because of a seed storm that devastated the interior of Azania, not because of New Persian force of arms.

What causes the largest seed storms? It turns out that there is a cause and it is predictable. The characters of New Persia: Before the Storm don’t know that, and the exact mechanism is something that will be revealed when the time comes.

Lesson #13- You need an agent

13. You need an agent for the big time. Small time isn’t so bad.

The big publishers choose agented authors first. Agents are good at making submissions on behalf of their principles, and they often know editors personally. Agents have often done the job of acquisition editor themselves. They know what editors are looking for and how to give it to them. For a percentage, and an agent will make your submissions for you and confer a much higher chance of acceptance.

I said an agent, not a secret agent

That’s a good route to try first. If you succeed, it’s a much more lucrative path than going to an indie publisher. You get top-flight editors to hone your manuscript. Large publishers have marketing combines that will put your book in stores and promote it for you. You’ll still have to promote the book yourself, but it will be easier.

If that doesn’t work out (it didn’t work for me), then you may end up at an indie publisher. That’s OK. Here’s what’s nice about it.

Control.

I got to choose my cover, my blurb, and I do the edits myself. I decide, for the most part, what the reader sees. The book will reflect my vision, for good or ill.

Bigger publishers mean less control. The final product may be better than what you could write yourself, but it won’t quite be the same as you would have managed.

Which is better? Depends on what you want. Big publishers will bring your work to a larger readership. Smaller publishers let you have more of a say in what the reader sees. Big publisher means big publicity, where a small one puts the full burden of promotion on the author.

I’m not going to say I wouldn’t mind a big five contract, but going indie is pretty good, too.

Lesson #12 – You are special

12. You are special.
Walls exist to keep other people out. They are there for you to climb.

The whole edifice of publishing makes it hard to get a book out there because there are too many books written. The way to think about it is that the barriers to publication work to keep your competition out. The walls work for you.

The walls are there for you to prove how badly you want it. They are there to get almost everyone to quit. That’s the purpose, and if you want to write for publication badly enough, you’ll learn how to overcome the barriers.

Desire, as I said in the last lesson, isn’t enough. You aren’t special in the sense that you get published because you are who you are. You get published by learning the game and playing to win.

You have an immaculately prepared query letter. You have a synopsis polished to a shine. Your MS is not only finished but as free of errors as you can make it. You have revised it so many times you can’t remember. You work, and work, and work.

The ability to work hard and adapt is what gets you over the walls. Not being you, but doing what you need to do to get where you want to be.